Unit #4 Blog #3
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Prof. Rhonda Kyncl
Caleb chose to go with the assignment of analyzing There Will Come Soft Rains by Ray Bradbury. I looked at doing this assignment, but I was a little intimidated by it being that the professor has such a close tie to it. I wasn't sure I could do the piece proper justice, but according to what Caleb says about his feedback it appears he did. I have alot of the same problems as you do on that kind of paper where I get too factual and don't make it as fun for the reader as I could. I learned this in Unit #2 when we did the community profile. At the end of the day though, I personally believe this class made us all better writers than we were three months ago.
Tuesday, October 11, 2011
Friday, October 7, 2011
Unit #4 Blog #1
Unit #4 Blog #1
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Professor Rhonda Kyncl
Chapter four in our book focuses on proofreading and revision of papers. It tells you all the steps to take to make sure that you are taken seriously as an author and your paper is taken seriously by the reader. After writing your paper you should wait one day before you come back to proofread the paper so that your mind has time to "cool off" and you can clearly think about what you have written. When rereading the paper you want to read it as though you are someone who has an opposing view of the topic that the paper is written about. Does the author give enough information about the subject so that if you had no clue about the topic you would be able to make a formed opinion after reading the text? The biggest key to proofreading is being able to slow down and digest every word that has been written to decide how it can be improved. For example, make sure that the text is not too wordy when you can get the same point across with less words. Try to use action verbs when at all possible to make the paper seem more exciting.200 When responding to a writers draft you should read the paper a total of three times. During the first reading you are just trying to get the main idea of the paper. On the second reading you want to look at content, organization, and completeness of the draft. On the third reading you should focus on audience, style, and tone. Keeping these ideas in mind will make sure that the final draft of your text will be the best it can be.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Professor Rhonda Kyncl
Chapter four in our book focuses on proofreading and revision of papers. It tells you all the steps to take to make sure that you are taken seriously as an author and your paper is taken seriously by the reader. After writing your paper you should wait one day before you come back to proofread the paper so that your mind has time to "cool off" and you can clearly think about what you have written. When rereading the paper you want to read it as though you are someone who has an opposing view of the topic that the paper is written about. Does the author give enough information about the subject so that if you had no clue about the topic you would be able to make a formed opinion after reading the text? The biggest key to proofreading is being able to slow down and digest every word that has been written to decide how it can be improved. For example, make sure that the text is not too wordy when you can get the same point across with less words. Try to use action verbs when at all possible to make the paper seem more exciting.200 When responding to a writers draft you should read the paper a total of three times. During the first reading you are just trying to get the main idea of the paper. On the second reading you want to look at content, organization, and completeness of the draft. On the third reading you should focus on audience, style, and tone. Keeping these ideas in mind will make sure that the final draft of your text will be the best it can be.
Unit #4 Blog #2
Unit #4 Blog #2
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Professor Rhonda Kyncl
The assignment that I found most gratifying was the writing assignment in Unit #3 in which we got to add a new chapter to a short novel we had read. It has always bothered me that the novel I had added to had never really finished the story in my opinion about what happened to the characters as they got older and became adults. Many authors do not ever tell you what happens to the characters in their novels as time goes on from the end of the story. I really enjoy books that tell you what happens to them later on. It does not have to go for 10 or 20 years, but a simple Joe went on to become a famous hockey player would suffice in many circumstances. A good example of this is at the end of the movie Stand by me, which is based on the novel The Body by Stephen King, the author tells you what happened to each of the main characters as they got older. For some of the characters things turned out well. For others it did not turn out so well, but you feel like you know more of the story by knowing the outcomes of their lives.This whole spill of mine may sound dumb to some who read it, but it's just the way I feel about the particular subject. I'm obviously not a literary expert by any means. There aremany who are smarter than I am on this subject that can probably explain why it is better not to reveal further lives of characters.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Professor Rhonda Kyncl
The assignment that I found most gratifying was the writing assignment in Unit #3 in which we got to add a new chapter to a short novel we had read. It has always bothered me that the novel I had added to had never really finished the story in my opinion about what happened to the characters as they got older and became adults. Many authors do not ever tell you what happens to the characters in their novels as time goes on from the end of the story. I really enjoy books that tell you what happens to them later on. It does not have to go for 10 or 20 years, but a simple Joe went on to become a famous hockey player would suffice in many circumstances. A good example of this is at the end of the movie Stand by me, which is based on the novel The Body by Stephen King, the author tells you what happened to each of the main characters as they got older. For some of the characters things turned out well. For others it did not turn out so well, but you feel like you know more of the story by knowing the outcomes of their lives.This whole spill of mine may sound dumb to some who read it, but it's just the way I feel about the particular subject. I'm obviously not a literary expert by any means. There aremany who are smarter than I am on this subject that can probably explain why it is better not to reveal further lives of characters.
Friday, September 30, 2011
Unit #3 Blog #3 Response to Shelly's Blog
Unit #3 Blog #3
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I agree with Shelly about reading to your children. My mother used to read to me all the time as a small child and I can Personally remember alot of the stories to this day. I also remember the time that we spent together reading. I read with my little girl every night. Though at this point there are some books I can read to you word for word without ever seeing the book, I don't mind too much because I know she will have memories of her daddy reading to her and hopefully it will spark a lifetime love of books for her as well. Though with the advances in technology her generation may not know what real books are because they will all be ebooks before long. Hopefully she'll at least remember the fun times we had acting out the books.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I agree with Shelly about reading to your children. My mother used to read to me all the time as a small child and I can Personally remember alot of the stories to this day. I also remember the time that we spent together reading. I read with my little girl every night. Though at this point there are some books I can read to you word for word without ever seeing the book, I don't mind too much because I know she will have memories of her daddy reading to her and hopefully it will spark a lifetime love of books for her as well. Though with the advances in technology her generation may not know what real books are because they will all be ebooks before long. Hopefully she'll at least remember the fun times we had acting out the books.
Unit#3 Blog #1
Unit #3 Blog #1
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
In this blog I am going to talk about planning & drafting a paper. The first thing you need to is to establish your goals. What does the professor want? Often the assignment will contain key words such as analyze, compare and contrast, define, describe, evluate, or propose that will assist you in determining what direction to take. (Fagley, L., 2009, The Penguin Handbook Third Addition, p. 17). Next, find a topic that you care about. Then explore your topic. Ask the Who, What, Where, When & Why questions. Another good thing is freewriting. I freewriting you basically write down anything that pops in your head for a set period of time and then go back and seperate the good ideas from the bad. Another way of getting ideas is by brainstorming. At the end of your brainstorming session, you cn create a list of good ideas for your topic.The next step is that you need to create a thesis statement. A thesis statement is basically where you tell your idea of what your paper will be about. a good idea would then be to create an outline. This is basically done by starting with your thesis and then outlining all your supporting data in headers underneath in order that you will be writing about them.The final thing you are going to want to do is to write a rough draft of your paper. You should be aware that this will not be a perfect draft or final draft of your paper and that it will be revised some. If you follow these steps, you should not have any problems with writing assignments.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
In this blog I am going to talk about planning & drafting a paper. The first thing you need to is to establish your goals. What does the professor want? Often the assignment will contain key words such as analyze, compare and contrast, define, describe, evluate, or propose that will assist you in determining what direction to take. (Fagley, L., 2009, The Penguin Handbook Third Addition, p. 17). Next, find a topic that you care about. Then explore your topic. Ask the Who, What, Where, When & Why questions. Another good thing is freewriting. I freewriting you basically write down anything that pops in your head for a set period of time and then go back and seperate the good ideas from the bad. Another way of getting ideas is by brainstorming. At the end of your brainstorming session, you cn create a list of good ideas for your topic.The next step is that you need to create a thesis statement. A thesis statement is basically where you tell your idea of what your paper will be about. a good idea would then be to create an outline. This is basically done by starting with your thesis and then outlining all your supporting data in headers underneath in order that you will be writing about them.The final thing you are going to want to do is to write a rough draft of your paper. You should be aware that this will not be a perfect draft or final draft of your paper and that it will be revised some. If you follow these steps, you should not have any problems with writing assignments.
Monday, September 26, 2011
Unit #3 Blog #2
Unit #3 Blog#2
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
Though some people might find it kind of weird, my favorite book of all time is "The Outsiders" by S.E. Hinton. The story takes place in Tulsa, Oklahoma in 1965. On the surface it is the story of a gang of poor kids vs. the rich kids. Actually, it is a story about a 14 year old who winds up finding out who he really is and what he wants to be in his life. When the story opens we meet Ponyboy Curtis who is a 14 year old greaser who lives on the wrong side of the tracks with his older brothers Darryl "Darry" and Soda Pop. Their parents were killed a year ago in a car accident and since then Darry has been taking car of his two younger brothers. Ponyboy and his friend Jonny meet up with two girls at the movies who are rich kids or socs as they are called in the book. After the movie they have a runin with the girls boyfriends who are some of the most popular socs in town. After the girls leave with their boyfriends Pony and Johnny go to a vacant lot where their gang hangs out and start talking, but wind up falling asleep. Long story short, Johnny winds up killing one of the socs and he and Pony run away to hide in an old church in Windrixville. When they go to town one day they come back to the church a school had been up there on a field trip and the kids caught the church on fire. In the process of saving the kids Johnny is paralyzed when a board falls on him. In the end he dies and Pony learns that his family is the most important thing and that people are just people not greasers and socs.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Composition
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
Though some people might find it kind of weird, my favorite book of all time is "The Outsiders" by S.E. Hinton. The story takes place in Tulsa, Oklahoma in 1965. On the surface it is the story of a gang of poor kids vs. the rich kids. Actually, it is a story about a 14 year old who winds up finding out who he really is and what he wants to be in his life. When the story opens we meet Ponyboy Curtis who is a 14 year old greaser who lives on the wrong side of the tracks with his older brothers Darryl "Darry" and Soda Pop. Their parents were killed a year ago in a car accident and since then Darry has been taking car of his two younger brothers. Ponyboy and his friend Jonny meet up with two girls at the movies who are rich kids or socs as they are called in the book. After the movie they have a runin with the girls boyfriends who are some of the most popular socs in town. After the girls leave with their boyfriends Pony and Johnny go to a vacant lot where their gang hangs out and start talking, but wind up falling asleep. Long story short, Johnny winds up killing one of the socs and he and Pony run away to hide in an old church in Windrixville. When they go to town one day they come back to the church a school had been up there on a field trip and the kids caught the church on fire. In the process of saving the kids Johnny is paralyzed when a board falls on him. In the end he dies and Pony learns that his family is the most important thing and that people are just people not greasers and socs.
Sunday, September 11, 2011
Response to Tanya's Home Sweet Home
Unit #2 Blog #3
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Comp. I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I found your blog on growing up in New York City very interesting. New York is exactly opposite of the place where I grew up. You said that it was the city that never sleeps and my town was the city that never woke up. I can only imagine what it would be like to see people out and about at all hours of the day and night. The only people we have out at night are criminals. Another cool thing would be all the diversity you must have encountered. All the different races, religions, and cultures mixing into one big melting pot of society is what this country was founded on. Playing in the fire hydrants is something you see on TV, but I didn't know people actually did! You had a very interesting childhood and you should be proud.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233 Interdisciplinary Comp. I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I found your blog on growing up in New York City very interesting. New York is exactly opposite of the place where I grew up. You said that it was the city that never sleeps and my town was the city that never woke up. I can only imagine what it would be like to see people out and about at all hours of the day and night. The only people we have out at night are criminals. Another cool thing would be all the diversity you must have encountered. All the different races, religions, and cultures mixing into one big melting pot of society is what this country was founded on. Playing in the fire hydrants is something you see on TV, but I didn't know people actually did! You had a very interesting childhood and you should be proud.
Saturday, September 10, 2011
Where I come from
Unit #2 Blog #2
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233-01 Interdisciplinary Comp I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I grew up in the giant metropolis of Rush Springs, Oklahoma. It is a small town about 50 miles Southwest of Oklahoma City. The sign outside of town said we had a population of 1200 and a few old soreheads, but reality was there were about 600 people in town and at least as many in the country. The Oklahoma Department of Transpertation had sealed the towns fate in the mid 1970's when they rerouted Hwy 81 around town.Rush Springs when I was a kid was right of the movie Footloose. The town was ran by the Church of Christ members and it was illigal to dance in the city limits. There were two bars, but they were out in the county and you can bet that the powers that be kept tabs on who's vehicles were there and dealt with them accordingly. It was the kind of town where people didn't lock their doors and little kids could leave the house in the morning and not come back until dark. No one worried because everyone knew everyone and if your kid did something wrong they'd bring them home,or more than likely just whip them on site and send them on their way. As a teenager, we would sit on main street sometimes for 2 hours before a car would come by, and then it'd just be the local cop.We were famous for our watermelons and once a year had a watermelon festival. It was the coolest thing as a kid. For one day the population of the town would swell to 30,000+ by people who came from all over to the celebration. That's where I was raised on a farm about three miles West of town. In fact, I bought the place a few years ago when my Dad passed away. I have no intention of ever living there myself, but I have alot of good memories there. We raised goats, pigs, cows, and watermelons. Not everyone can say they ever drove a tracter to school, and not be the only tracter in the parking lot!
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233-01 Interdisciplinary Comp I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
I grew up in the giant metropolis of Rush Springs, Oklahoma. It is a small town about 50 miles Southwest of Oklahoma City. The sign outside of town said we had a population of 1200 and a few old soreheads, but reality was there were about 600 people in town and at least as many in the country. The Oklahoma Department of Transpertation had sealed the towns fate in the mid 1970's when they rerouted Hwy 81 around town.Rush Springs when I was a kid was right of the movie Footloose. The town was ran by the Church of Christ members and it was illigal to dance in the city limits. There were two bars, but they were out in the county and you can bet that the powers that be kept tabs on who's vehicles were there and dealt with them accordingly. It was the kind of town where people didn't lock their doors and little kids could leave the house in the morning and not come back until dark. No one worried because everyone knew everyone and if your kid did something wrong they'd bring them home,or more than likely just whip them on site and send them on their way. As a teenager, we would sit on main street sometimes for 2 hours before a car would come by, and then it'd just be the local cop.We were famous for our watermelons and once a year had a watermelon festival. It was the coolest thing as a kid. For one day the population of the town would swell to 30,000+ by people who came from all over to the celebration. That's where I was raised on a farm about three miles West of town. In fact, I bought the place a few years ago when my Dad passed away. I have no intention of ever living there myself, but I have alot of good memories there. We raised goats, pigs, cows, and watermelons. Not everyone can say they ever drove a tracter to school, and not be the only tracter in the parking lot!
When too much is too much.
Unit #2 Blog #1
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233-01 Interdisciplinary Comp I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
Blogging is a great way of people to express their opinions and beliefs to a wide audience easily. A persons blog could be read by hundreds, thousands, or even millions of people on the web. That being said, some things need to be kept to one's self or the few people who saw it. Blogging about how you tied someone to a flagpole and beat them with a rubber hose is not something you should post. Besides the fact that you are admitting to a criminal act, you are also talking about things that can effect the rest of your life. Potential employers have started to research the internet on applicants and finding things you can only imagine. Blog posts,Facebook, and Twitter are just a few of the places they look to see how applicants spend their time not at work and if they talk outside of class about their current job. Even if your boss is an old bald guy who needs to braid the hairs coming out of his nose, it's probably not in your best interest to post that on a social network site where anyone can see it. Not only could it be another employee who is looking for a reason to nark out anyone who may stand in their way of a promotion it could also be your boss or even someone who knows his cousin that is reading it. A good question to ask yourself, before you hit the post button on any social network site, is would my mom be emberassed to read this? If the answer is yes, then you might want to think twice about letting the entire world know about it. Though it is therapeudic to vent about a situation that you are frustrated about or fun to rehash about the night before and how Jim Bob woke up with a horse in his bed it is not in your or his best interest to tell everyone else about it.
Aaron Pilgrim
LSTD 1233-01 Interdisciplinary Comp I
Dr. Rhonda Kyncl
Blogging is a great way of people to express their opinions and beliefs to a wide audience easily. A persons blog could be read by hundreds, thousands, or even millions of people on the web. That being said, some things need to be kept to one's self or the few people who saw it. Blogging about how you tied someone to a flagpole and beat them with a rubber hose is not something you should post. Besides the fact that you are admitting to a criminal act, you are also talking about things that can effect the rest of your life. Potential employers have started to research the internet on applicants and finding things you can only imagine. Blog posts,Facebook, and Twitter are just a few of the places they look to see how applicants spend their time not at work and if they talk outside of class about their current job. Even if your boss is an old bald guy who needs to braid the hairs coming out of his nose, it's probably not in your best interest to post that on a social network site where anyone can see it. Not only could it be another employee who is looking for a reason to nark out anyone who may stand in their way of a promotion it could also be your boss or even someone who knows his cousin that is reading it. A good question to ask yourself, before you hit the post button on any social network site, is would my mom be emberassed to read this? If the answer is yes, then you might want to think twice about letting the entire world know about it. Though it is therapeudic to vent about a situation that you are frustrated about or fun to rehash about the night before and how Jim Bob woke up with a horse in his bed it is not in your or his best interest to tell everyone else about it.
Monday, August 29, 2011
Response to Shelly's blog post
Hi Shelly,
Like you, I was raised doing our work on Big Chief tablets and Husky pencils. I look at the advances in technology in just the last 10 years and it amazes me yet is scarry at the same time. My three year old daughter knows how to get on my iphone, go to Utube, and make it play her favorite Elmo videos. To me that is just amazing. I remember when we got an Atari as a kid and my sister and I were amazed at the half circle thing that ate dots and ghosts. I won't even go into when we got our first VCR and how many time my sister made me suffer through Footloose with Kevin Bacon. I believe that all this technology is helpful to the world in the long term. I just wanted you to know that I found your blog both entertaining and very informative. Keep up the good work!
Like you, I was raised doing our work on Big Chief tablets and Husky pencils. I look at the advances in technology in just the last 10 years and it amazes me yet is scarry at the same time. My three year old daughter knows how to get on my iphone, go to Utube, and make it play her favorite Elmo videos. To me that is just amazing. I remember when we got an Atari as a kid and my sister and I were amazed at the half circle thing that ate dots and ghosts. I won't even go into when we got our first VCR and how many time my sister made me suffer through Footloose with Kevin Bacon. I believe that all this technology is helpful to the world in the long term. I just wanted you to know that I found your blog both entertaining and very informative. Keep up the good work!
LSTD 1233 BLOG POST 2
Hello everyone in blogger land. Here I am posting my second ever blog in my life. Let me start with a little history about myself. I grew up on a farm in a small rural community in Oklahoma. I am now married with two children. I work for the local police department in my town,and am also a real estate investor. Ok enough with the history,its time for the real stuff. I started writing short stories at the young age of 7. I won some awards in my younger years for various stories,but as I got older the passion just seemed to fade away. I still have plans to write my own autobiography at some point. Even though it probably won't ever be read by the masses, at least it may help my children see why I am who I am and why I stand for the things that I do. I enjoy reading biographies, especially about self made business men and entreprenuers. I also enjoy reading true cime and even fictional crime novels.
That being said I would be amiss if I did not address what I feel is the biggest problem with todays fiction authors. The vast majority start off with a very interesting, complex body of work. They then reach the arc of the story,and wind up ending the story leaving unanswered questions about both the characters and the storyline.
Ok, i will get pff my soapbox now. Thanks for reading my blog.
That being said I would be amiss if I did not address what I feel is the biggest problem with todays fiction authors. The vast majority start off with a very interesting, complex body of work. They then reach the arc of the story,and wind up ending the story leaving unanswered questions about both the characters and the storyline.
Ok, i will get pff my soapbox now. Thanks for reading my blog.
LSTD 1233 FIRST BLOG
Here we are writing my first blog ever. Earlier I read the assigned chapters for unit one. Although I
found all the chapters very informative, the plagiarism section in chapter 21 seemed to stick out the most to me. It not only explained the basics of plagiarism,but also went into details explaining what is required to document and what is not. Also, it helped me clarify how to quote your sources without plagiarizing, and how to summerize and paraphrase. By going off what I had read earlier studying for the plagiarism quiz, I was almost convinced that you couldn't write anything at all without being accused of plagiarism. Reading this chapter helped me to understand that just because you may have an idea that someone else had or you write a thought that someone else may have thought, that is not considered plagiarism. I have to admit that writing this blog has not been as hard as I had made it out to be in my mind. When I graduated from high school computers were not used everyday. Todays children literally have the world at their fingertips and are being taught how to properly use that information. Although it does increase the chances that a few will use the information in bad ways such as plagiarizing on school assignments, I personally feel that the good definately outweighs the bad when it comes to readily available information.
found all the chapters very informative, the plagiarism section in chapter 21 seemed to stick out the most to me. It not only explained the basics of plagiarism,but also went into details explaining what is required to document and what is not. Also, it helped me clarify how to quote your sources without plagiarizing, and how to summerize and paraphrase. By going off what I had read earlier studying for the plagiarism quiz, I was almost convinced that you couldn't write anything at all without being accused of plagiarism. Reading this chapter helped me to understand that just because you may have an idea that someone else had or you write a thought that someone else may have thought, that is not considered plagiarism. I have to admit that writing this blog has not been as hard as I had made it out to be in my mind. When I graduated from high school computers were not used everyday. Todays children literally have the world at their fingertips and are being taught how to properly use that information. Although it does increase the chances that a few will use the information in bad ways such as plagiarizing on school assignments, I personally feel that the good definately outweighs the bad when it comes to readily available information.
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